Need help on a story

Story by psy1123eu

Hi, long time reader, first time poster (and writer)

I am working on a story - so far it is about 80 pages (expected to end up at around 150 pages), but I would like an experienced hand to look it over and modify it as needed.

This is what I am looking for...

someone to add dialoge (im not very good at it, i am better writing as a continuous monologue from a single point of view, and creating realistic detail) I have a little dialoge but not much...

flesh out (so to speak) the sex scenes, they may be fine, but when writing it can be difficult to see if it is good, and sometimes I feel the need to rush it to continue the story.

On the flip side, without dialoge, sometimes the story feels a little rushed to get to the next sex scene...

Whoever I decide to take on this project can have 100% writer's credit. I am just having fun writing it and dont care about the credit. The only caveat is that I want to finish the story - so far I have just started the 9th chapter and want to continue it to about chapter 11 or 12. From there, I dont care. Oh yeah, my only other condition, is that I want it published here, on F3, Chesttalk, and Storiesonline - any other site is okay with me too. If whoever takes it on doesnt like those sites (or isnt registered), I guess I can take the final copy there...

I also dont know how to post it on here with the 'spoiler' or how to hypertext it or anything other than copy/paste.

The basic premise of the story is:

A 13-14 year old futa girl (very petite, with a 12 incher and a very healthy chest) who initially hates her male part. She ignores it and concentrates solely on getting action with her female side. Through this she slowly learns to appreciate her penis, and eventually finds a somewhat stable relationship with a girl that forces her to come to terms with it.

The part of the story that I have worked up to is where her regular fuck-buddies move away - and I am about to really make the story a little deeper. I have concrete ideas on where I want it to go from here and will write them over the next couple of weeks. Whoever I choose to work on this will get a better outline of where I will be going later.

I am hoping for a seasoned writer that has several posts on her already - but Ill see how the turnout is first before making a decision. Im looking for something in the direction of Kelly's Story, Trish's Monster, or any HoneyMoon Story. As opposed to the feel of Resident Penis or the Flesh Project.

Please reply with any experience and how best to send you a copy of the file.

I will probably not look at this post again until after the holiday, but will choose someone by mid-next-week.

Thanks and I look forward to seeing it online!

here is a taste....

My body was trembling now, and I noticed I had two wet spots in my sweatpants. One, disgustingly was at the tip of the tent in my pants where my dick ended. The other was in my crotch. I didn’t want to ruin my sweats, so I pulled them off, making my dick slap up against my belly with a loud thud, sending another wave of pleasure through me. Even though I was laid flat, the head was poking at the bottom of my breasts.

Ignoring my gross deformity, I used one hand to keep massaging my breasts, and used the other to explore my pussy. Running my fingers along the drenched lips, my eyes involuntarily rolled into my head. I slipped one finger in and I couldn’t help but moan loudly. Being a girl was awesome, I didn’t know I could feel so good. I added a second finger in, but that was it. I was so tight, I had to really press to get the second digit in.

I built up speed, finger-fucking myself faster and faster. I could hear the sound of my juices being forced out of my pussy and running down my ass-crack. I really started moving around trying to force more of my fingers in, my hips uncontrollably thrusting up at my hand. The head of my dick was covered in juices (later I found out was called pre-cum) and was bouncing all around my stomach and hitting the bottom of my tits.

I felt the pleasure building and I never wanted it to stop. All of a sudden, my body froze and I felt like I exploded. My cunt cramped down on my fingers so hard it I couldn’t move them. My vision left me for a few seconds as I felt wave after wave of pleasure wash over me. The seizure in my muscles loosened and I felt my dick start to spasm. My hips were in time with the spasms and I felt like I was trying to piss repeatedly and uncontrollably. I felt something large shoot its way up my dick, adding another wave to my first orgasm. I tried to open my eyes, but they were clamped shut from the orgasm.

I felt a thick warm liquid hit my chin hard and immediately another surge came from the base of my dick. It hit my chin, then another, and another. I was hit in the chin with a full 6 blasts before the 7th just exploded all over my boobs with less force. My whole body was twitching now, with random aftershocks of the orgasm. My dick added a

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