Beginner writer need help

Story by Futa-psycho

Hello everyone, recently I post my first time story here! 

I am very excited, but i am still a beginner. English is not my native language that caused me to have lots of grammar & spelling mistakes. 

Also i need to learn how to connect my scene together & jump from one to another plus be as detailed as possible. 

I have lots of plots in my head i just want to put them on paper. 

Hope i can get help on that, thank you all to much.