New story by Adrock based on H3, need opinions.

Hey guys, I need help to see if this will do for a great Halo 3 story. Check it out...

Cool rain on the fallen planet which we call "Earth".

I, Master cheif have yet to go and defend my own.

Cortana, my female AI side-kick, are now here, on halo,

ready to do our mission to save the galaxy.