blackout (futa/male femdom)

Hi I'm new here and this is my very first attempt at writing something. Besides a couple of stories for highschool English but that was a long time ago and i half assed them anyway so take it easy on me. But mostly I'm looking for criticism so if you have any suggestions or advice please comment i need the help.

And even if you don't have any advice if you could just leave a comment as to whether or not you enjoyed the story i would greatly appreciate it. I'm still trying to decide whether or not i should continue the story.

Update: I took archer's advice and separated the dialogue

Mike came to in a stupor, with the worst hangover he'd had in years. He was 24 years old and six feet tall with short cut black hair. He kept himself in extremely good shape, which is most likely why he did so well with the ladies despite his outright obnoxious personality. His vision was still blurry so he couldn't yet see where he was and his thinking wasn't very clear due to his splitting headache. Uugh... he groaned as his vision slowly started to clear and he could see where he was.

He was sitting on the floor leaned up against the front of a bed in a small dark room with what looked to be concrete walls. It was sparsely furnished, from what he could tell the only furniture in the room was the giant wooden frame bed behind him and a wooden dresser up against the opposite wall. Mike thought to himself "well this is a new one. I've blacked out in some weird places before but this takes the cake.". He decided he had better get out of here before whoever owns this place walks in and finds him. But as he tried to get up he realized he couldn't move his arms. He looked back to find that his arms were tied behind his back. It was only then that he noticed the rope tied around his neck connecting him to one of the massive bedposts.

Questions raced through Mike's head as he thought "What the FUCK is going on! And what the hell did I do last night?".

Overcome with frustration he finally yelled out "Hey! I don't know who you are but you better get out her and untie me this FUCKING second!".

As the door opened Mike heard a feminine voice announce "My aren't you a loud one?".

The woman who walked through the door was rather small Mike would have guessed around 5'6". But what really stood out about her was her looks, she had D cup breasts that looked even more impressive on her small frame and the face of a movie star. At any other time Mike would have been thrilled to see a woman like that but right now he had bigger problems.

He quickly replied "Finally! now untie me, and tell me what the hell I'm doing here".

"Such a filthy mouth, there is no cursing in my house. In answer to your question you stumbled into my house last night drunker then I've ever seen a man. Since my precious dog missy just died it seemed like a miracle. I'd been sent a new pet to keep me company. isn't it great?".

"No it isn't great you crazy bitch!" Mike sc